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A collaboration over too much coffee.
coffee and pen

30 October, 2004

A new story...

You pocketed
My secrets
In the folds
Of your white shirt,
And walked away.


You’ll stand
And watch
My dazzle act
And grin silently, arms
Folded, in the shadows.

You’ll watch
As I distract
Lesser men, with my
Dangly pearl ear-rings.

You’ll see
More of me
When I but raise
An eyebrow, you’ll push
Another mocha smirk my way.

Just admit
Before you touch
Another hidden chord,
You were ravaged too,
And not exactly unwillingly.



Blogger Max Babi said...

Hey Manisha,

This is one of the best poems
surfacing on the frothy shores
of caferati blog.
Candid, introspective, creatively
crafted and written to trigger off
imaginative forays in readers mind.
Great stuff.


30 October, 2004 08:37  
Blogger Pye said...

Lovely... the way you brought an entire relationship to life with these few words. Really well done.

30 October, 2004 11:18  
Blogger jivay said...

You've really set all the chords ajangleing...

30 October, 2004 12:19  
Blogger annie said...

love the opening lines specially... and 'mocha smirk'... evokes so many images :)

30 October, 2004 13:52  
Blogger junoesque said...

whew..what pictures this creates :))
amazing say the least !!!!

30 October, 2004 16:23  
Blogger rats said...

beautiful, manisha

and welcome back

31 October, 2004 14:52  
Blogger sunilrnair said...

manisha, is that hurt permament?

Can someone please add why they love the work and try to explain the poem instead of just say wah! wah! kya poem hai?

01 November, 2004 16:13  
Blogger zigzackly said...

Why on earth should a poem need explanation? Or introduction and background for that matter?

01 November, 2004 16:28  
Blogger zigzackly said...

That said, i agree with you, Sunil, that it would be nice to hear what the reader got out of the poem, from the perspective of both a reader and another writer.

01 November, 2004 16:37  
Blogger John said...

Sunil, you are right. Instead of saying wah! wah! wah! or rah! rah! poetry enthusiasts should explain what they like about a poem.

Now, I wonder what that "Now," is doing in the middle?

03 November, 2004 16:25  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

fabulous...the words and the pictures they paint.

03 November, 2004 22:17  
Blogger SPECKLED_BAND said...

Very classy work, Manisha! Just chanced upon this - am I glad too!

12 November, 2004 00:02  
Blogger Ubermensch said...

im struck,
i had given up almost for quality writings online.

in one word,sublime.

what do i like abt it? u see the symmetry of the lines reflected on ur consciousness and a emotion conveyed to , all in simplicity.what more can u ask?

28 November, 2004 21:37  
Blogger Parth said...

Terrific work. I am glad I stumbled upon this site

08 December, 2004 03:12  

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