If Only...
a few pithy meets
(what a pity…)
didn’t even know
if I liked what I saw
or,
what conclusions to draw
studied words,
tempered actions
flitting eyes
discomfited at being
caught in the act
of fake fending
yes, these were mutual
maybe,
only these were mutual…
have we self-timed-out
ourselves in life?
but that too,
guess I’ll never know
(what a pity…)
didn’t even know
if I liked what I saw
or,
what conclusions to draw
studied words,
tempered actions
flitting eyes
discomfited at being
caught in the act
of fake fending
yes, these were mutual
maybe,
only these were mutual…
have we self-timed-out
ourselves in life?
but that too,
guess I’ll never know
Labels: poetry
Selected by Blue Athena |
16:57 |
2 Comments:
Lovely poem. :-) I hope you'd work on the revisions you've mentioned. I think it will vastly improve the appeal of the poem. :-)
Cheers
Dan
Yes, I just needed to take out the last four lines.
Hope it reads better now and not as long-winded and explanatory as before.
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