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A collaboration over too much coffee.
coffee and pen

01 June, 2005

pia's white dress

every morning mama washes
pia's white dress clean;
then she wears it to the sea.
the sands colour it golden,
on a cloudy day, the sea makes it grey
and just when she is leaving for home
the coconut palms fringe it green.

every morning mama washes
pia's white dress clean;
then she wears it to the sea.
the corals colour it pink, sometimes fawn,
often blue
and the jelly fish leaves purple lights on it too.
The sandy crabs leave little claw marks.
and the yellow and black fish
frill the edge with their little stripes.

this morning when mama went to wash
pia's white dress clean;
it took her a little longer than usual
she had to wash off the bird song,
and the roar of the waves.
the sound of the wind and the sound of the rain.
then the butterflies had left myriad hues.

every morning mama washes
pia's white dress clean;
then she wears it to the sea.



Blogger bikkuri-bako said...

A&N is doing you good! i think i need to come take a dip in that inspiring cove you seem to have discovered.
lovely poem.
there is a song in there.

01 June, 2005 15:44  
Blogger rats said...

anytime, bikkuri-bako
and this place is full of inspiring coves, you wouldn't want to leave.

02 June, 2005 05:45  
Anonymous Nidhi said...


02 June, 2005 11:33  
Blogger Gangadhar said...

Fantasic blog!!

02 June, 2005 12:54  
Blogger sunilrnair said...

your work gets better with every day. send some of that sea to replace this dirty one by my side

02 June, 2005 14:06  
Blogger rats said...

thank you sunil
anytime you want this sea.....

02 June, 2005 14:59  
Blogger sunil said...

How beautifully dreamy, imaginative yet as real as a song! Great indeed. Lovely.

03 June, 2005 19:46  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

you make me think of Hiawatha and Nokomis!!

07 June, 2005 12:52  
Blogger dihing said...

so good!
you make me think of Hiawatha and Nokomis

07 June, 2005 13:28  
Anonymous Niks G said...

The poem has a subtly sad end to it which gives it a certain charm. My understanding is that... Just as the very caring mama washes pia's dress everyday, it is unbeknownst to her that she is not only washing the dirty shades away but also the memories and the tranquility or the peace of mind that pia gets on her beach patrols because she eventually takes time and washes away even the Bird song and the sound of the rain which actually symbolize happiness n joys of life.
In my view, I think this poem has a lot of relevance in the lives of the present young-adults and their relationship with a parent. Just as pia's mama washes out the joys unintentionally, even if it takes longer than usual out of motherly concern, u make the reader wonder weather the concern of parents is taking away much more of the children that what is supposed to be taken or restricted. Poet, u try to show the communication gap between the child and the parent but also cover it up by portraying how the child adjusts and goes on with the life that he is bound to live as she has no other choice.
I personally loved the poem. Looking forward to read more such wonders :) - Niks G

06 February, 2012 18:52  

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